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Your personality goes from 3rd person (she/her) to 1st person (I) and needs to be edited to 3rd person. It is also really similar to your other characters: brave, confident, overprotective etc. I know it can be difficult to write a personality but perhaps some changes to make your character more unique would be helpful.
Aspiration. She has the same aspirations as your characters Melody Turner and Sun Kim. There are so many professions out there aside from Healer and Jewelry/Clothing designer and would likely give you somewhere new to explore rather than staying in the same Career paths.
Comparing this character to your other characters also has many of the same likes and dislikes:
LIKES:
-The Outdoors x2
-Reading x3
-Hanging out with friends x3
-Music x2
-Shopping x1
DISLIKES:
-Snobs x4
-Bullies x1
-Snakes x2
-Prejudice x2
-Liars x2
If you are struggling to think up likes and dislikes there are resources you can use with lists of things you can look through.
School Years. Again the max is 500 words and you are at 618.
Please make some changes and then tag the admin team when you are ready to be reviewed again.
